Story treatment: The “Mailed” Thief

Story treatment
The “Mailed” Thief

This is a true story in Poland. The smart thief mailed himself to the warehouses of the package delivery companies, then he climb out of the package after employees left for the night, and steal the valuables from other packages or the workplace. How does he get away? He makes his getaway by sealing himself and his stolen goods into the same box, which addressed to his Warsaw home.
After many customers complained about lost items in their packages and the untraceable missing valuables in workplaces of the delivery companies. The police didn't find him out until his partner got caught because of other crimes, whose job was to deliver him to the delivery companies.
This was a true crime in Poland last year. I am going to make a documentary that is mainly unfolding this story by adding some created funny elements.

Scene 1. The thief, Muchy, is a man lives in poverty. One day he finds out the “Trojan Horse Story” in a comic book, which inspires him the plan.
Scene 2. Muchy discusses with his best friend, and they decide to this. His friend packs Muchy in a large box as a package, and sends it to the delivery service.
Scene 3. After the staffs go home at night, Muchy climbs out of the package, opens the packages waiting for delivery in the warehouse, searches and collects the valuables, and seals all the packages he opened including himself. (Uses fast motion to speed up this scene.)
Scene 4. Muchy’s partner opens the package, pulling Muchy and the stolen goods out of the delivered package. Apparently, they succeeded in their first try.
Scene 5. Two consequences might occur if they do the same thing in the US and China. In China, the package might be thrown and kicked when being delivered to the warehouse (because the delivery companies often treat packages badly), he is badly hurt and passes out, and misses the chance and time for stealing.While in the US, the package is being transferring all the time in the automatic machines, and finally stacked on the rack in the well-equipped and computer-controlled logistic center. Of course he is stuck and couldn’t make any move.

Coke

COKE

“Fucking change or don’t come back!” a young women screams from her door to her boyfriend who leaves. A man, Dan, is in his early twenties, short red hair, thin, yet slightly muscular. He might seem like your typical young kid, no direction, no job, and maybe soon, no girlfriend. His girlfriend has a nine to five job, and also goes to local undergrad school part time. He steals from her regularly to feed into his addiction. She knows this and wants to end the relationship if he doesn’t stop soon. He parties all day with friends and comes home to her usually wasted.

This day is different. He seems despondent, he starts to realize he doesn’t want this life any more. He knows that he really loves this girl and would do anything for her. He starts to really struggle with his addiction. However, he is afraid to be left alone, lose all of his friends, lose the only life he has ever known. He goes to a party and has a hard time, torn between doing drugs or not. He gives into temptation. This is done as a quick montage, a lot of editing.

Dan finally decides to go home, go home to what ever he may face. He lets himself in, goes to his girlfriend who is sleeping and whispers, “I promise I'll change.” You see him look at the dusty bible on his night stand. He grabs it, opens it to a page that seemed right. He finds a small bag of coke, that he had forgotten about. The camera focuses on his face, and then to the bag. He clenches it. His girlfriend's eyes open, she lets out a gasp of air...fades to black.

The whole movie is done as a montage. A lot of quick cuts, fast paced, like a drug trip.